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Autumn 1/5/2012
The leaves fall and the wind catches them and cleans them up.
The wind swishes all the trees around making music.
The trees keep the animals nice and warm.
All the animals start to hibernate cold by the temperature.
The temperature gets colder and makes leaves fall.
WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA
SELF ASSESSMENT
- Includes four nouns (from observation): Yes
- Made the nouns do something: Yes
- Started each new description on a new line: Yes
- Extended each line so it makes more sense: Yes.
Good, clear reading of your poem, Kharn.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you say your long words hibernate and temperature.
Cool Kharn, your poem is well done and great clear speaking.
ReplyDeleteWhat is your favorite part of your poem?
Great story, it's really eye catching. It make me feel like I'm there.
ReplyDeleteI like your story kharn, And I do like " The leaves fall and the wind catches them and cleans them up"
ReplyDeleteI rate it a Ten out of Ten!
"Awesome kharn"!
ReplyDeleteits such a small piece of writing
but its awesome
cool poem really good nouns
ReplyDeleteThat really sounds like autumn. Good Kharn.
ReplyDeleteThat is amazing Kharn.
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